good

that was good, it would be better if it had a story behind it, but it was still good

(title in work)

^^Good Points^^
An ok start. You at least had a little animation to go with the little guy, so his body wasn't completely stable while he was moving along.

^^Needs Improving^^
I didn't really get a skiing feel from this. The graphics really don't show that at all. The background is boring gray, and the landscape is simply lines. Could use some more details in this to give it a scene.

Not enough detail

I can understand how proud of it you are - you've managed to get an animation combined with a tune that works together well. You managed to keep the filesize down, which is a great achievement, considering the quality of the music.

Basically, what I'm suggesting here is that you zoom in a bit and give more detail to your central character. When drawing the stick figures, zoom into them in your flash program and draw using a small tool, to give the most detailed look you can prepare - it's well worth it, as the control is so much greater.

The next thing you'll need to work on is a background, so similar techniques will be required there. Then comes the challenging part - a plot. The good writing makes a flash if you've got the time and effort to do it justice in the production. I look forward to seeing this.

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how can this take so long

i'll give a 3 for the flash and 2 for it too acctuly have been accepted at the portal.