It was ok nothing spectacular
I thought it was good for your first try well done.
Author Comments
this my first flash / submission. basically, i gave up on it in the end, because i realized that it was terrible. oh well, i'm submiting it because i can take the constructive criticism. it's quite a crapshoot, and probably a waste of your time, so.. have fun tearing me apart! :D
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i thank everyone for their thoughts on this, good or bad. C:
i'll try harder next time. :D
Great first try.
I'd like to see you re-work this flash after you've developed more.
its good for a first flash
as punkrockjesus said
it seemed like a slideshow
do worry i believe you'll make an improved flash soon =]
Hmm.
I think it's very good for a first flash submission. The music video concept is a good idea however I think the flash lacks a lot of movement. It seems as though the whole thing is just a series of pictures.
Very well for a first try though. Keep it up. :)
Very emo music
Shows promise. The hair needs tweaking, and the lyrics' subtitles weren't absolutely perfectly synchronized with the music, but it's in no way total cr*p according to NewGrounds' recent standards for first-timers (i.e. "total crap" would be anything stick or clay done in 20 minutes). Audio quality was low, but i guess you did that due to filesize, in which case i sort of thank you for it, although it wasn't very inteligible at that rate. Please continue with your work.