My thoughts
lol kinda reminds me of my first flash movie not very pretty... But you gotta start somewhere. This does kinda suck but not as bad as alot of the junk I have seen and as a first attempt at flash its not all that bad. Your timing isnt quite right I had trouble reading everything before it went on to the next block of text and I can read pretty fast so you might want to improve on that part. Other than that simply making more movies and playing with flash and you will be putting out good content in no time. Flash takes practice jump on a torrent search engine and look for flash 8 total training it is the best way to learn flash ive been able to find.