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Okay, I fixed it up (tried to, anyway. 3 times longer), and here it is. My second flash given a second lease on life. Its kinda stupid, kinda pointless but funny,kinda. I'm new to Flash so just want some constructive criticism or feedback. thank you. ps. broken mouse + old computer + zero talent = THIS! But hey, maybe you'll enjoy it...or maybe not.

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good aanimation but no point.

now you're one of the people that need inspiration. cause youve got the animation talent, you just have no good sense of a storyline. the comedy was not very funny at all (not sure if it was supposed to be funny).

pick up a good story that will make people interested and then animate it and im sure it will be really good.

Grumbles responds:

k, will do.

It was not too bad but it needed some work.

I thought that the sound for it was good but the graphics need to be better. But it was good because you did not have flash or anything like that. Also when you do things like this you need to have a plot or a certain point to make to your audience for making a video. That is what gives the video flavor. You should also add some humor and violence in there to it makes for an exciting video. another thing that I liked about your flash is the butttons people had to push it is always a good thing to keep the watchers interacting with the video because it grabs there attention. I bet if you do all of this you will become an excellent flash maker. Keep up the hard work. It will pay off eventually if you do not give up if this video does not make it just try a different style. I can see that you have got potential and talent for this stuff.

Grumbles responds:

Thank you, I'm aware its pretty bad. I just do 'em for practice. And to get helpful reviews such as your one.

It's not brilliant...

But you put some time into it, and it shows, compared to the endless crap we get through here of a 2 second stick man doing something.

Little things like the waves breaking on the shore, and an actual attempt on shading make me like this a lot.
For next time; a story. Come up with one. Doesn't have to be immense, but it gives your flash a backbone, something to work on. Then come the characters etc. then finally actually making it. I make it sound so simple :p

Don't be disheartened if (and probably when) this doesn't make it through judgment, for a second piece of work, this is not at all bad. I'll be looking for more of your work.

Grumbles responds:

Thank you for your time. I appreciate when people give a friendly, decent helpful review.I think the main problem is my terrible attention span...

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