The story was just starting to get interesting when the ending threw it on a full halt. I can't tell if that's your main plan or just got tired and made another ending.This is not for everyone's taste but still, people will get a chuckle or two out of it. Good job.
I was expecting something amusing and wasn't disappointed lol. I thought the rhyme was fun, mother goose worthy.
u need to improve this piece of work
that was one-dimensional... although the art was amazing, I thought of something more to it...
It WAS crap.
It was short and had a poor drawing style, along with the fact that I lost all sound halfway through...
I think you might have been going for some Dr. Seuss style writing, but it was too dark and I didn't feel it.