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HILT: issue #1

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This is a comic book. It is not animated and requires reading. Please enjoy.

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Was the #1 really necessary?

Another entertaining comic. And I wouldn't say "more might never happen." It sounds like you actually gave this a chance to continue. :/

Emptygoddess responds:

Number 1's are always necessary.

Not bad

A few spelling errors crept into the piece at strip 14, but by then, the story had all but played itself out. Executioner, protest and "too much of the public" were the ones that I spotted. Typing the manuscript in MS Word and running it by a spell checker would sort these, but I would urge you to proof read, before publication.

A nicely drawn piece, that could have used a splash or two of colour, just to give a little more life to it - not necessarily totally coloured in, but a few pastel shades in the right places could have really brought the story to life.

Please, make more of these, they look very nice and it seemed like a story that I coul;d actually get into, despite it being Manga, which I've never liked. It reminds me a little of the game system from White Wolf - Exalted. The supernatural beings that channel essence to do incredible things that seem like magic to the mortal man. Perhaps it could be a direction used in this story?

[Review Request Club]

Emptygoddess responds:

Could be. Probably won't be. Glad you liked it. I am lazy though, so more might never happen.

question?

what cant you do right? i mean damn! this was a great piece of work.

Emptygoddess responds:

I never did learn how to play the tuba.

Beautiful Work

Loved it, Every thing was good, just needa work on ur speeling a lil bit XD but other than that it's perfect

Emptygoddess responds:

I would rather die than edit! DIE!

Naw, i just suck so bad even several edits often miss things.

Splendid

I nice little comic. Once again though I have to say, someone should proofread your work lol

Confuzed = Confused
Portest = Protest
Desicrating = Desecrating

And those are all on one page. Everything else is beautiful, don't listen if anyone says otherwise, just double check your spelling lol It's terrible to see something good blemished by something so trivial.

Emptygoddess responds:

Hey, an S turning into a Z is always a time for celebration. It has evolved into its cooler form.

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Apr 6, 2007
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