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Zekoma: Part One

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The first part of the Zekoma Series.

This my first animation so plz only leave nice comments and adivce.

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Practice makes perfect.

Practice makes perfect.
[This is duckyp from DeviantArt]
Anyways, I'll break it down. This is my first review...in about a year or so, haha.

Graphics: 8: As I said, shade. Otherwise, the animation for the characters, tweening, wasn't bad. It was good for a first movie. And don't stretch images, like the keyboard.

Style: 8: I based style on animation. Good job.

Sound: 4: Yeah, it was basically the loops that drove everyone crazy.

Violence: 5: Shooting and using blue balls of energy. That's a five.

Interactivity: 5: The play button.

Humor: 5: Some of the dialogue made me laugh, since I've heard the same thing so many times. Ideas will help you.

Overall: 10: 10, since this is your first video.

Good luck on your next part!

Ranos responds:

Thankya for that^-^ Yap the dialogue has been used before, but I dont know were XD. No one likes it, nooooooo one likes that annoying loop XD. Just a quick question for you, do you know were I can get a good music maker for free? Now its time to view you animations.

A bit corny, but not bad

The dialogue was a little cheesy and ham-fisted, and spelling was pretty bad. If you had voice acting it would have been better.
Art was alright, pretty good for a first submission. It was pretty well animated for what it was, and didn't jerk around too much or anything. However, the piano looping in the background was annoying; it would have been better to just get one song running through it.
Anyway, pretty good flash, especially for a first try. Look forward to more in the future.

Ranos responds:

Thankya^-^ Almost every review on this make me lath(0_0 I cant spell), because they are all so true lol. I wanted to change the music but I couldnt find any thing that would sute it, do you know were I can get a music maker for free from?


That music that kept going was annoying it would have been nice to have some different music in there especially when he was being attacked by those troops. Voice acting would have made this more interesting. I think it would be great then i would continue to watch.

Ranos responds:

The next one will have voice acting. I got a question for you(send me a PM with your answer) Do you know were I can get a good music maker for free? It would really help make the rest of the Zekoma series alot better.

Nice for an initial foray

I must say, I was impressed. Of the few rough patches, a few stood out. The first was how some of the graphics were stretched out, such as the keyboard. There were a few spelling mistakes, and for this I would recommend getting a microphone, and having some friends help with the voicework. Other than those low points, it was done very well. You should be proud.

Ranos responds:

Thankya^-^ Most people pionted thos things out but I already planed on useing voices for part two, Thanks for the advice tho. Me and the creators of "Lifes A Bitch" are going to de the voices for part two of Zekoma and Part 3 of Lafes A bitch.

Very good for the first time.

You did an exceptional job on this with it being your first animation, but there was a ton of things you could of improved. One, the movie just seemed...slow?, especially since he was escaping. Another thing is that his only offensive ability seemed to be that he ate people with his hand haha. On the next one try and send out more than one "ball" thing. An example was when he was confronted by the three guards at the beginning, a nice big explosion would of been better. And three, try and pay a little more attention to detail, especially later in the series. As for explosions and such dont just take a chunk out of something, if that makes sense. Overall for all the effort and being nice because this was your first, I voted a 5.

Ranos responds:

lol, This comment was funny XD Every one sees it as only one move, he uses three in the hole thing, Sole obsorb(I spell bad XD), energy sheald and Orb exploion. His three new moves for the next one will be Sole Cannon, Sloe Blade and Area absorb. Thankya for your time and the review.^-^

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Mar 18, 2007
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