A inspired start, though there is much to improve.

The main weaknesses of this piece are the graphics, sound, and narration.

The loading screen map is rather poor. The animation is decent, but the characters look quite bad and have almost no detail or personality. I also feel your palette of colors is quite bland.

The sound, though quite good, is very poorly recorded. Try to get out the static next time.

Finally, there is too much text to read on the screen. Perhaps have a narrator read this script over a montage?

You've got a cohesive story, good ideas, and a definite (though underpracticed) skill at animating. My advice is to give it a bit more time and love. I'm looking forward to episode two.

Good Job on the Improvements

I remember when you first submitted this...without the noise. Good job on the sound effects XD. Two things though, way too much to read, that and size of the writing was a pain in the ass. Either shorten it down, or have a narrotor reading it. That, and I'm assuming after watching the clip that the thing at the begginning of your flash was a map or something, maybe a little more detail, and better clours, it reminds me of looking at a poltical map for the U.S, way too much colour going on there, or at least defined colour. Other than that good job, sequal should be more interesting with a background story to it now. XD

Stz

Ha, don't give up your day job kid. Still pretty decent submission. Nice Job.
Animatation was okay. I loved the beggining, somehow it made my computer shake.
Drawings could have been a bit more realistic, half the time I couldn't tell what was going on. Can't comment on sound cause my speakers aren't setup.
Overal pretty shaweet. You pass. High five! No? okay.