A inspired start, though there is much to improve.
The main weaknesses of this piece are the graphics, sound, and narration.
The loading screen map is rather poor. The animation is decent, but the characters look quite bad and have almost no detail or personality. I also feel your palette of colors is quite bland.
The sound, though quite good, is very poorly recorded. Try to get out the static next time.
Finally, there is too much text to read on the screen. Perhaps have a narrator read this script over a montage?
You've got a cohesive story, good ideas, and a definite (though underpracticed) skill at animating. My advice is to give it a bit more time and love. I'm looking forward to episode two.