The intro of myflash movie "Shara - In the Beggining"
Full version will be out in time, it will either be in sprite, or as it is here, i still havnt decided, watch and enjoy... i added tht weird music coz i thought it went well, and notice the heartbeats in the flashbak when she is a little girl, im proud of myself =P i think my effects are nice as well, especially when she is cryind, sorry this has become more of a documentry, oh well... ENJOY!!!
K
^^Good Points^^
This intro looks like you are a promising Flash artist. The storyline seems very interesting, something that I would definitely like to see. The graphics were very detailed and looked great. I hope you do release the full version some day.
^^Needs Improving^^
The text moved a bit fast, and I didn't get to read most of what was spread on two lines at once.
Oh, that's just kickass.
honestly, that is awesome, make the series, and you will have a place in the top 50.
woah you rly think? thx m8!
Good Start.
This could actally turn into a popular series if you work on the anime details of the chars. Also the words went by too fast so it's kinda hard to read for slow readers.
ok thx for the review m8
Read for Constructive Criticism
so you're an anime cartoonist like me
well here are the gaps in the movie:
the face wasnt shaped as it should. To help, go to Deviantart, and look up Anime Tutorial, the head shaping should help alot. Also, the eyes were good, but the hair was too plain to say it was real, when the eyes were, making the eyes and the hair clash. I put a 5 for the style, because the idea of the movie seemed incomplete, and not enough of it was told to give the audience a fairly good idea of the plot or the settings.
ok, thanx for the help m8!
One thing
This is promissing I hope to see some action in your movie.
Your character seems deep I hope not to wait until 2010 to see this movie but who knows ;)
One thing if you can manage to slow down the text this was pretty hard to read because of the speed. (English isn't my first language tought)
Anyway love your SHORT preview
chronotrip
thank yu very much, i enjoyed reading your review and in the short version i wil definatly be fixing the text!