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Oh my god, that sucked so hard it nearly pulled my face off...
1:
If you're going to use an IRL image, DO NOT include the part where it cuts off and then draw something that's supposed a part of it with a brush tool, that makes it look horrible.
2:
Try to sound less droning when you say "oh my god I killed-", it drags on.
3:
If you're gonna give something an object to use, PLEASE try to most the arms so they actually operate the gun.
Good points:
1:
Well, at least you cut out the white around Charlie this time.
And if you're gonna say the "I was lazy part", why are you making (AND posting) them?
Some ctitique that should (hopefully) help you improve.