This wasn't bad, I liked the 3D Battlecruiser Loofah (though it seemed a bit strange when it stopped moving but the engines carried on blazing) and protoss's face, and the planet looked good too. The human characters though weren't too amazingly well drawn, their proportions were all off, etc. The commander's face looked more like a five year old than a military officer. It is so round - if he is supposed to be fat it's not really working, maybe do a google image search for a fat guy's face. Their dialogue though is good, it gives the characters a lot of... character. Also: I don't think the protoss have a language (they don't actually have a mouth to speak with!), they use telepathy instead. And I have to say not a lot really happens, but I assume it's just the introduction to a series.