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it was a pretty good flash but the writing was really small cuz if its for a school its probably important so u should make it bigger, other than that great job
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Look around, not much i know but please give me any advice in your review.It's a mock site. It's for school too so be gentle =D.
Excuse the fonts, they aren't quite as they're meant to be.=(
Mr-manson69 responds:
okay thanks, i shall make it bigger then =). thanks for reviewing.
Website Perhaps?
*GOOD*
The tech graphics were did great. The little mini-games were fun to play.
*BAD*
This was really short and could have maybe been extended.
*OVERALL*
Theres not much to say about this except good job on the mini-games.
Mr-manson69 responds:
Lol thanks. =)
Yer well this was just the intro page thing, there is actually going to be a movie attache to the final product.
...Thanks=)..thanks for reviewing.
Not bad...
It's decent as far as websites go, but there are some important questions you'l have to answer about it with time. I know, you'll just say that you're not going to keep the site, but you just might. With that in mind here we go:
1. Are you planning on making it permanent? If so, you may want to look at what it is the site's purpose will be. Nothing more aggrevating than a really pretty site that has no purpose you can immediately see.
2. What happens if people don't have flash installed on their computers? Will you provide a Lo-Fi version, or have a flash installer somewhere on the site, like an flash auto-detect script?
3. Most important: who is your target audience? What do you want them to see, what do they like, dislike? Are you a member of this crowd? Do you have some way insight into how you'll attract their attention?
Mr-manson69 responds:
Well...Let's see here...
1. The "site" isn't going to be a real one, it's purely for school. Submitting it on here was a means of getting peoples opinions as to how and what i should do to improve this.
2. If it was infact going to be a real website in a real domain then yes, i would add links as to where the user could download the software needed to view the site. Otherwise it'll just be posted on newgrounds, where it can safely be assumed that poeple have the correct software to view this.
3. Well i've kinda already answered this by saying this is only a "mock" site but hey, sure i'm going to change it around a lot more as i'm going to use this as a menu for a movie i have in production.
Thanks for your long and insightfull review =P..Hehe =)
Good Lookin site. Functions well...
Maybe it's just a bit small... I can see it's a template, and doesn't actually do much, but I think it's great work, and the basis of an excellent site for the school! Just make it BIGGER!!! I can hardly see the text / icons / buttons ect.
Mr-manson69 responds:
Thanks lol, yer didnt quite work out the way i expected with the text and all..and besides its only an intro thing to a movie im working on.=D
I liked it!
I think that this is a good flash, the graphics are good, it has a good style, a good sound, no violence (of course), great interactivity and it doesn't have a bad humor. In fact, the mini-movies is quiet humorous! If you practice, you can be a very good flash-maker!
Mr-manson69 responds:
Thanks =D. I think it looks too shabby though mainly due to the text which has been changed from my orignal choice =(. And yes i have a much more humorous clip to put there buuut, i cant find the .fla for it!! hehe thanks for review.