It Was Alright But Needs A Lot of Work
You've got a lot of things in there that bugged me. Do you go back and read what you type after you type stuff? Because you do realize that your character description section is full of typoes and bad grammar, right? Like instead of saying, "He is" or "He's" you used "His". Very bad. Have someone else look it over for you and check your spelling.
As far as for the movie itself the graphics were pretty okay but I have a question. What is up with that gun the robber was using? It seemed as a bullet shell or what looked like a one slowly came rising out of the barrel....? Dude, whats that? Do you know how guns work? The barrel is not where you load a weapon nor do shells ever come out of there. Go study up on them or something because I don't know what you were trying to pull.
And I'm sorry to say your humor didn't get a single laugh from me. It was kinda old humor. What annoys me is when artists comment on their own flaws in the movie or anything that's strange. "Why don't you have a face?" "Why is my voice gargily?" You know, stuff like that. Artists feel those are questions reviewers will be asking and commenting on so what the artist does is bring up these questions himself in the flash in order to play along with the audience, and it's sort of a disclaimer. But really, you just look like an idiot. Whether or not that is your reason for doing so, it still looks that way and I recommend fixing it. I think those were the only problems I saw. Fix these, find better humor overall, and you'll do way better next time.