Yeah, the loader girl.

Heh, quite good idea that loader girl.
Graphics could be improved, try making narrower lines and smoother animation. The black what-ever-you-call-them effects between scenes looked stupid because they were jerky, tween it. Actually putting menu items in the menu on the wall was a good idea, though it distracted a bit, maybe lines would have been enough. The style is good, just make the graphics a little smoother and it's better. Good choices of music, I didn't really like the music that much, but still good. Actual sounds would've been nice. The plot was way too short and not very great but it was still a lot better than no plot at all. Work a little more on your next flash and it will be better. Overall good enough, 3/5.

cool

thats good for your fisrt flash i realy liked it your lucky to have that skill good work and keep it up
, canzo

nice...

yeah, it's cool, the idea it's good but the end I didn't like it so much... it's should be more worked and a better idea of... deform the person's mind, y'know? hehe. well, in fact, it's okay and pretty nice idea of the girl.

that was sweet

i liked the loader girl too... =D

that was cool... but a bit short... i recommend making the part where the bully is trippy and sees all the wierd stuff longer.... it will be funny if u have the bully getting scared from like people walking down the halls or a trashcan and stuff... u get the idea...

well....

-the animation sucked
-the music got hella annoying
-no build up-needs improvemrent