I was really amazed at how authentic this was. You really see slice of life stories here. It's nice to see something so mundane. The music was great. I really felt sorry for her in the flashback! That drawing looked nice enough!
The animation is quite good. It's just a very sincere little cartoon. I even liked hearing all that school stuff. It's been awhile since I've been there, but I remember what it's like. I'm glad you're promoting the formation of relationships like this.
Thanks for checking this out 10 years after it was made! I'm tempted to redo the audio to make it sound better and more presentable. I also saw all your other reviews. I appreciate you checking everything out!
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This cartoon was really enjoyable. It was very mature and much unlike the rest of the stuff on Newgrounds. Instead of comedic nonsense, this was a very serious, respectable submission. The voice acting needed much work as you probably already know from others' reviews. Also, you need to work a bit on proportions of the human body. You're still very good at drawing and animating people, but with movements such as Jenny running away from Zack at the dance-well, that needed a bit more work. But I know that's hard to do -- It's easy to draw a picture of a person running and it looking very realistic in proportions, but when you have to animate it, it gets very difficult to keep the same sizes and shapes on every frame.
So yes, this was a great submission. I gave it a 5, which it surely deserved. Keep up the good work!
Voice acting needs Work
I think this video and it's message could have been expressed much better if the voice acting was decent. I find that there is a lot of staleness in the way the characters speak out. Especially Zack. It sounds as if all of this was read off a cocktail napkin as a test and not an actual try. You have to give more emotion if you want to receive me. I like this particular style of movie, so i think if you made a new one and thought about maybe improving on the voices, you could get even better rates.
This is the first time i offer, but i am quite capable of making a good voice actor for various male roles. And, i don't why i am saying this, but if you ever needed any voices done, i think i could help you make your flashs more powerful.
Anyways - Great idea, needs more work on voices.
no offence but...
that was a piece of shit
it was a fucking soap opera about some bitch who thinks she can draw but she sucks at it anyway and some emo comes and shows her up and she starts being jealous
sry but this isnt my type of flash
i go to newgrounds to get away from people like that
buncha whiny bitches
*oh someones better at something than me*
*i need to go cry about it because im imcompetent*
*whaa whaa whaa*
so in conclusion
Jealousy is healthy and natural, but be smart about it.
This movie reaally didnt have much action to it.I think the music isnt that good either. Sorry but this just isnt my kind of movie.