(( Needs Compression ))
I thought this was notbad, it does need some compression and was probably due to the song it could be compressed better to better fit for the viewers and more people to view it, the song was good though, and you need to fix up the graphics and add detail maybe some flashy effects to make it stand out.
~~THINGS TO IMPROVE ON~~
some compression of the file probably the song.
A large file but had a good song.