Dude, work on it more! There can be potential in this if you add the following:
1.(and this is the most important) If you want to make a game succesful, make your own characters and background. Characters aren't too hard to make!! :)
2. Make it so when you walk over something, you collect it.
3. The story is too hard to follow, make it something like, "When he awoke, he wasn't hurt. But his cards were gone! The (ex. bullies) have taken them!
4. That is all. Wock, out!