Not bad but needs improvement.

Well notbad this ws interesting it was decent for your first, but could use some fixing up, some of the text, and some extra stuff is needed maybe abit od effects something that shows abit more effort, anyways nice job, but think about the suggestions on this.

Needs work, but its a nice start.

~X~

Hey, Just to let you know: Before you finish the flash, before you complete the project, make sure you check your spelling :)

I enjoyed the storyline, but the animation was bad. If this doesnt make it i'll try and animate it for you. AIM me at Nzxer. Hope it makes it!

-N Z X ER

I liked the story, very original. However, you did not give credit to the music from Elder Scrolls, Oblivion.