E for Effort..
if the elevator is supposed to be sketchy, you should make it look a little more dodgy. It would help people to see that this elevator is a risk taking venture. Try making it look a little frightning. Maybe even show inside the elevator and make it look trashy on the inside as well. As it is it just looks like a normal elevator, and if someone were to not read your little blurb about why he's scared of the elevator they wouldn't know why he's all shakey and such.