The Macintosh Computer Hater Says...
When i heard all the gunfire, i was afraid it would be more stick figures and lines that represent blood. However, it seems like one of those 'tons-o-guns-and-violence' flashes that's trying really hard to have a plot... some sort of story.... Still, it seems like a mixture of trigun and final fantasy 7, and it lacks any real continuity. I guess it'd work strictly as a preview if it had better art and was composed better with small indicators of where this story wants to go. File size is nice and trim, tho, and that's always good.
It's like its trying really hard to have a real story behind it, like a 9-year old trying everything to grow a beard... but as it stands, it's just not quite working. improve the art and work on plot clarity and continuity in your story telling and it's good to go.