you know it has to be done...

you need to finish it tyler. its tight tho- i like it a lot. the subtitles do subtract a little, but id say the creative call is yours on whether to make them sync up better or just cut them. same with the narration- your call. the voice is humorous, but it feels out-of-place when you watch it. maybe you could redo the narration in your normal voice? good luck with it, i hope to see it finished.

good, but...

I would have liked it a lot more if there was only music, no voices. Having text was a good idea, but the way you had it come in was distracting. The talking took away from the movie, which had an otherwise really cool feel too it.
In the end, it was good. It just needs a bit of tweaking, from my POV.
:) Good job.

nice work

i thought yer graphics and animations were very good and well used, i reckon though that the whole narrative thing kinda took away from the feel of the thing

Nice art style; narrator and story needs work.

First off the positives: I like the art style with the large angry black lines, and odd uses of color. While its inconsistent, some of the animation is quite good. It will be interesting to watch you mature as an animator.
Now the negatives: I don't know if its intentional, but the narration is horrible. The lisp and unemotional drawl is painful to listen to. The other criticism - and this is important - is that your storytelling needs work. If this is going to be a multi-parter, you have to give the viewer a reason to want to see the next episode. Just watching two guys get slaughtered for no apparent reason other than one of them was "The Target," is uninteresting. I hope that you put some thought into your next episode. The premise has potential...

Cool!

Very cool man...and nice grafics,and the style is realy different :D,i would like to see all the story,but i guess the episodes are too short,if you could make them longer it would become better,cause you can keep the same public!

See ya,nice work!