Sucked me in
Your writing really sucked me in. I don't know if stuff like this really fits on newgrounds just yet, but I know I'd like to see more of your writing. Keep up the good work!
not so great
its just a flash book, its not a movie. or a game, but that's kinda obvious
nice idea but to dull and lacking to attract any real attention
Is this finished?
Newgrounds is a place for animations. There isnt nay actual animation here! I think you need to illustrate the story with animation and sound, definitly add some background noise. If this is supposed ot be an interactive story, put interactivity in it!
hope this helps :-)
it was a nice story though
This...is an interactive story? A game? Where is the interactivity? I think that either I missed something or there is no true way to interact with this thing other than selecting a new page or section. It's a real shame too, because the story is pretty cool.