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way too lazy to finish so yeah

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O.K.

good. the only part that made me laugh though was the devil part. but it didnt make too much sense. sry.....

Sorry....

Sorry but you lost me since the boss turned into the devil....

Missing a lot...

The loading screen was a bit awkward. The words were not alligned in the centre and I wasn't sure if that was intentional or note, but it would have been more effective to keep them centred. The loading bar was also a little bit large, which distorted attraction by viewers.

I then tested out the effectiveness of your pause button, noticing that your background tween moved even though the flash was supposed to have been paused. Try finding methods to stop the overall flash from moving.

Your drawings and style were very good. I must say that I was deeply impressed by your level of animation and this level is much greater than average flash. If practiced correctly, I could expect some very powerful flash from you in the near future.

The next thing I noticed was the strange voice recordings. Increase the recording volume. A higher level of sound makes the overall level of the movie much more effective and this was missing from your movie. There were also points where the microphone reached a 'volume spike', which distorts the sound input and makes the viewer less inclined to watch. Also focus on adding personality and persona into your voices so they take life and become more effective.

The final part I picked up on was the strange 'unfinished end'. Guns n' Rose's 'Welcome to the Jungle' joke would have been more effective if you placed the timing correctly. There were also points in the flash where two sounds played at once and this made it very confusing for me to dinstinguish which ones I should have heard.

The final thing is the spacing between the 'boss' and 'tom' at the water cooler. There are just little kwirks here and there that require improvement. Fix these little things up and your flash will become much better in the future times to come.

If you're going to make a flash, please finish it.

fishybulby responds:

"If practiced correctly, I could expect some very powerful flash from you in the near future." -Alkador

No you won't. i am so over flash it's amazing, i just had a 90 percent done flash, for animation and nothing to do, so i finished it in 5 minutes.

Yeah...

You really should have finished it before submitting. There was definitely a good premise here, but it kinda fell apart, y'know? I gave a 7 in sound because of the song, that was a good choice. But the ending really confused me... why does satan show up? And what's with the boss being all small and whatnot? Good animation though, at least with the boss's head turning, that was a nice touch. I like the idea (of a guy showing up to work like that), and it was kinda funny, but take some more time next time to make it better (and actually complete the flash).

Funny at first but later pointless.

Don't submit unfinsihed work, its a waste of our time.

Well I thought the concept of a guy coming to work with one of those finger things was somewhat amusing. That was a good start but then your content just collapsed into unfunny pointlessness.

Your animation was decent, character design was lacking, your voice acting was terrible. It totally lacked any intonation or emphasis.

Remember to stop() your movie at the end when it's over and then make a replay button if somone would like to see it again.

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Nov 12, 2005
3:10 PM EST