Needs Better Pacing, Has Potential
The images go by too fast. Also there was a text frame that simply went too fast for me to read and I'm a fairly fast reader. I felt the music was out of place but instead of changing it, I felt that somehow you could make the events ever so slightly positive. For example: the character could be relieved and even happy that his suffering is going to be all over soon, which would make the music more appropriate and give the whole story a much more absurd and tragic tone than it has now. I loved the smiling dead woman; it was as if she was saying "It's ok, I forgive you," in death. I don't know if you meant it that way or not, but good job none-the-less.