Needs Better Pacing, Has Potential

The images go by too fast. Also there was a text frame that simply went too fast for me to read and I'm a fairly fast reader. I felt the music was out of place but instead of changing it, I felt that somehow you could make the events ever so slightly positive. For example: the character could be relieved and even happy that his suffering is going to be all over soon, which would make the music more appropriate and give the whole story a much more absurd and tragic tone than it has now. I loved the smiling dead woman; it was as if she was saying "It's ok, I forgive you," in death. I don't know if you meant it that way or not, but good job none-the-less.

It's better but it's still a bit too short

I did really like this when I first saw it but I did think that it needen some improvement, you've improved quite alot of it but it's still a bit too short and the storyline is a bit vague. Good Job Anyway!
Oh and btw, I have become quite a fan of bloc party because of this movie, I wanna thank you for that!

lighten up

and most NGers have the attention span of a goldfish so more animation less text please!

Not Bad, I like ur spirit

I like the way you plot out your stoyrlines, I think your talent could be put better towards more educational features. I think if you progress this way you should really be able to reach out to people.
Peace,
Dras

Dumb

No Story line at all pics were moving to fast ughhh blam it