It's...

Too slow, too long, too boring and it is too bad he didn't die so there wouldn't be another story.

Nice try.

Ok, so I didn't actually get through all of this, I closed it off. Why? Cos' it seemed long an tedious, and nothing happened except a whole lot of complaining.
I can get this s*beep*t at work.

But hey, keep trying.

watch this

This is one of the best I've seen here on NG. If 17+ watch this one. strange plot twist

Excellent!

While this was easily the longest movie I've ever watched on Newgrounds, it was certainly funny! Some bits did seem to drag on a little, but your voicing talents really made up for it. This must of taken you a very long time to produce, considering the length of it. Excellent stuff. I wouldn't be surprised if this lands up on the front page.

far too long

After what seemed like seven minutes of 'Pawn Shop Scene' I had to turn it off. Your dialogue suffers from what I can only describe as prosaic flab, and your voice acting doesn't do it much justice either. Not that I thought the actual 'voices' themselves were bad (although I did have some difficulty understanding 'Smoker' at times), it's just you didn't put enough subtleties in your dialogue, emphasis, and emotion, to the point where it became pretty monotonous.
Whew, that's the bad stuff aside. On a plus, it LOOKED great, you have a real flair for flash. I liked your narrator, and your lipsync was almost faultless. I just hope you read this now, and take it on board.