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After Revolutions p.1

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I've actually put some work into it. It didn't take me very long to make but what I did I put alot of effort into making. Most of the time I've been making to second episode. and I've been working on the second episode for almost a week now. So please get over things like I don't like stick figures-BLam. or I hate Matrix- Blam. if you're going to blam it blam it for story and graphics.Well please enjoy. and give a review so when working on the other episodes I know what to do to make it more entertaining.

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hmmm

Well u blam other peoples shit, theres a fine line between effort and bullshit, and this explains this line. i Really beleive u should spend a good week on something instead of putting together a piece of shit induced piece of crap like this. Im Out

DossMan responds:

your mom never hugged you did she?

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What was with the tron ripoff? And wtf... sorry, but pt2 better look completely different and actually be worth watching.

DossMan responds:

wait I've never seen tron. Oh and part 2 will

OK. I will try to be constructive here.

Well, on the positive side, it does appear as if you are trying, just really inexperianced. You should really make an attempt at voices, cause most people will instablam something with just subtitles. You're probably just starting out and it aint fair to crush your spirits just yet, but this did kinda blow. And only kinda. Like I said, there was effort and some decent application of knowledge. Just keep trying. In general, it needs to be longer, have voices, and have some sort of decipherable story. All things which you should be capable of doing with more effort. Keep trying.

DossMan responds:

ok I will

and thank you for not trashing my submission

1 of 12?!No more...please

oh god...if only the matrix used blob like stick figures and ships that looked like flying rock formations

Hey this was good for u first not 2 second flash

It was good, i judged it on how the story was and like it made sence, but like instead of making 12 of em' , maybe try to make like 6 and make them longer... well this is just my advice but i liked it.... like its not the BEST, but its good. Much better than most of the new flashes getting added! keep going like this, with more practice, comes ur flash on the front page.

DossMan responds:

ok I will... now thinking about 12 does seem alot. But the plot is long too. well uhm I'll just make as many as there are going to be. But yeah I'll definantly shorten the series a bit.

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Jan 8, 2005
12:33 AM EST