Interesting
It looked OK graphics wise, but the sound really needs cleaning up on this. One of the things that lowered the humour score is the fact I couldn't always make out what the characters were saying.
The voice recording also had a lot of air pops in it. There are a couple of ways to fix this, either get a pop shield (a circular bit of foamy cloth that sits in front of the mike) which stops it, or test the distance of the microphone by saying the phrase "This papaya tastes perfect" and keep moving the mike further away until the pop has gone.
I look forward to seeing more work from you and I think that if you clean up the sound I would certainly grade you higher.