It was pretty funny but I suggest trying to turn it into a flash or perhaps like a previous reviewer suggested, turn it into an e-comic
But rather than stick them in a flash, why not make your own E-comic?
Not bad. at all
Definitly needed some light music to accompany it, but all in all the story was good, i laughed a few times, and the graphics were really stylish, so you do get some points from me, good job "eddy" ;).
Really like to see more
Sell it to a newspaper.