Not a bad submission, really, but and old wendy's ad comes to mind.
"Where's the beef?"
"Where's the goddamned beef!"
Awright, I made that last bit up. Still, it needs something to float. Everything in here was either a Matrix rip (old) or window dressing. Or Salad Dressing, if you want to follow the hamburger analogy. Also, the sound on the diologue segment (the one bit in this entire submission that showed the slightest promise of "meatiness" sucked, to put it bluntly. I heard something about a video game... and that's it. Yay.
All in all, the piece shows promise, but it doesn't actually pay back on that promise. Long story short, I voted to blam it, just so you hopefully come back some day with something more interesting.