the artwork could use some help... but it's def not the worst i've seen here. the story had me laughing. i dunno... alot of the stuff just struck me as hilarious. keep working at it... and if you can get the artwork looking a bit better... i think we may have a winner ;-)
that could use some work
Well, it made me laugh.
The voice quality could have been better, but hey, not everyone can afford a big, expensive mike. Good job.