good start
It was a pretty good promotion of a story or game, I'm not sure which you are going for. Some of the script didn't come in to focus very fast, but then disappeared very quickly before I had a chance to read it. Also, it seemed like a big point of the movie was to use as many different ways of bringing writing up. Just pick two or maybe even three that you like best, and just use those. Over all, not too bad though.