Hmm...
The concept of this story is a very good! But how the story was played out is empty, and too fast of course. X is killed off with out any effort 'just-like-that' is oddly funny. Well, I'm not sure if you just made this one as a test...but I do know it wasn't the best idea to submit this to the public. Most on NG aren't smart enough to give constructive criticism. =p