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^^Good Points^^
This had decent sprite use. You had a lot of animated sprites and good backgrounds as well. I thought the storyline was half decent too. Not that original and kind of childish, but decent.

^^Needs Improving^^
The first thing I noticed was the choppy animations. You have a pretty low framerate, which is made quite obvious in the beginning. Also, all the scenes are very zoomed out, which they should have been a little more zoomed in. You should have put the text in boxes or something just because it looks better that way, and also, you should have used sound effects, there was nothing but that incredibly annoying music playing.

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Well sprite adventure flashes like this can often be recieved as dull and boring and this is pretty much following the same path unfortunetly, i thought you put alot of work into this though, i can see that you have spent a great deal detailing the animtion and getting all the script written up but it just comes off as a dull story to me. I thought that your text choice for the writing was well chosen though and you did put the effort in so good work.

~HJ~
(Hamy_jamy isn't even suppose to be here today)

gj

i like the fact that you are pretty good at flash and you have good skills.....next time use dialouge and dont use text...also get a better storyline....then you should be set

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good for your first try i suggest working on your sprites
orange metal sonic had the blue one on him and there were two gambets before magneto sucked em up

Good for your first try?

I see that you're trying to show your talent at making sprite movies. Well, good work, nice music theme, but the file size is madness.