00:00
00:00

Our goal is for Newgrounds to be ad free for everyone! Become a Supporter today and help make this dream a reality!

MWC19 - June - Discussion

619 Views | 19 Replies
New Topic Respond to this Topic

MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-05-31 12:12:45


Please post all questions, concerns, and comments for the June Writing Competition in this thread.


DO NOT DISCUSS THE CONTEST IN THE ENTRY THREAD. ALL QUESTIONS, CONCERNS AND COMMENTS GO IN THIS THREAD.

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-05 08:40:01


Alterrnative perspectives is a GREAT exercise in writing- and all forms of storytelling. I remember writing a story and even submitting it to a competition, then deciding that telling it from a different perspective would be MUCH more fun and interesting. In the end, I have binned the original, feeling confident that the second it much richer.


Sorry I haven't been able to enter the May one yet; nothing is gelling. I will give it one more try today.


We are the Dragons & Spirits. We are friendly people. Best Wishes, Ice!

BBS Signature

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-05 21:40:57


Finaly done the May entry. It all came into place. I popped it in, then discovered that everyone else is going for something longer and more complicated. Doesn't mean they are better!

Now then, where do I begin...?


We are the Dragons & Spirits. We are friendly people. Best Wishes, Ice!

BBS Signature

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-06 10:24:01


This is definitely right in my alley


Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-06 15:21:32


At 6/6/19 10:24 AM, akoronthebastard wrote: This is definitely right in my alley


Same.


Loving the theme, because there are so many ways to creatively propose this situation.

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-06 15:42:57


At 6/6/19 03:21 PM, Xinxinix wrote:
At 6/6/19 10:24 AM, akoronthebastard wrote: This is definitely right in my alley
Same.

Loving the theme, because there are so many ways to creatively propose this situation.


Yes so prepare for another fucked story bc that's exactly what I'm going to make

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-06 16:08:39


At 6/6/19 03:42 PM, akoronthebastard wrote:
At 6/6/19 03:21 PM, Xinxinix wrote: Same.

Loving the theme, because there are so many ways to creatively propose this situation.
Yes so prepare for another fucked story bc that's exactly what I'm going to make


I shall be waiting :D

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-12 20:05:39


@Fro, I can help judge this one, if you don't mind.


Would be fun (-:

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-24 03:27:12


What's with the people putting comments in the Entry thread? Am I missing something here? Just wondering.


TheVanillaLog

BBS Signature

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-24 11:25:39


At 6/12/19 08:05 PM, Xinxinix wrote: @Fro, I can help judge this one, if you don't mind.

Would be fun (-:


Sure thing. We need a couple more entries though. :(


At 6/24/19 03:27 AM, TheVanillaLog wrote: What's with the people putting comments in the Entry thread? Am I missing something here? Just wondering.


I'm unsure. I'll end up replying to them here and then deleting them in that thread. I've been so busy that I haven't even noticed them.


And by busy I mean I've been napping a lot recently.

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-06-28 09:37:44


At 6/24/19 01:20 AM, Aslanemperor wrote:
At 6/7/19 06:50 PM, IceDragon64 wrote:
At 5/31/19 12:10 PM, Fro wrote:
Can ANYONE think of some kind of sponsor for some kind of prize ???
Why not set up a special Patreon for these contests? That way anyone who wants to support it can put in a buck or two, and Patreon is already set up to make monthly contributions easy. As for tier rewards, how about if someone donates over $10, they get a vote in the judging?


This times 100 billion-thousand.


And would work as advertising.


At 6/24/19 11:25 AM, Fro wrote:
Sure thing. We need a couple more entries though. :(


Im just gonna write then.


I want to keep the momentum going for the writing contests. I'm really pumped for the My Friend Pedro contest, and Im almost halfway done with that, so I might not post my entry until the last day for this month's MWC.

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-07-03 12:22:38


Despite the strong start to the story I'm throwing in the towel. A lot of stuff has surfaced over last several weeks that has me back logged in lots of stuff. No worries, I'll check in for the October Writing Challenge and Inktober. Looking forward to your future endeavors.


At 7/3/19 12:22 PM, TopazAzul wrote: Despite the strong start to the story I'm throwing in the towel. A lot of stuff has surfaced over last several weeks that has me back logged in lots of stuff. No worries, I'll check in for the October Writing Challenge and Inktober. Looking forward to your future endeavors.


----


Don't worry mate, lets look forward to the October Writing Challenge as you said.


----


It was good while it lasted, I guess we have reached the end here fellow MWC19 writers. Thanks Fro for getting us all together and the always unknown secret judges. Atleast now reveal the secret judges Fro, as a final treat to us.


Until October everyone :)

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-07-04 22:32:20


Finished writing my cool 'lil story.


This prompt is a lot more enjoyable than you think, Fro :-)

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-07-23 15:54:02


This one was by far the hardest one to judge. I didn't have a lot of stories to read, but all of them were extremely well done. I'll try to comment on all of them briefly.


If I was grading these all of you got an A this time around. The difference between 1st and last place is probably the difference between having a 98% in a class and having a 96% in a class. This was probably the most fun to read for sure.


1st Place: @IceDragon64


https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26353800_post_text


I read this one twice. Once when my head was a little foggy one night and I kind of got the impression that it was boring the first time around. I read it again on a night where I felt better and realized how poetically professional the entirety of this was written. It truly showed the theme of the assumptions two people can have of each other.


2nd Place: @TheVanillaLog


https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26350561_post_text


Originality at it's finest. I loved the simplicity that of reading almost the identical stories down to the word with the only differences being the perspectives.


3rd Place: @Xinxinix


https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354831_post_text


What an incredibly dark and twisted, but yet simple story. I didn't see it going in this direction and just kind of said, "fuck" when I was done reading it. I had a couple of questions on why he didn't see any of the bodies on his way home, but perhaps that explanation is left to a longer version of this story.


Others: (In no particular order)


@LiamRomK


https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354651_post_text


I enjoyed where the first story was leading up to, but felt the second story was just a tad bit too predictable. I kind of knew who the thief was as soon as the second story started and the way that he ended up taking the art was pretty straightforward, but at the same time the simplicity of the steal was kind of like artwork. Taking something from someone with a complex plan is impressive.


@123survesh


https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354674_post_text


A couple of grammar/wording mistakes kind of brought this one down a little bit. There's a lot of repetition in your writing. There are times where you use the same word, for example "road" multiple times in one to two sentences that it's actually kind of distracting. My brain starts to expect the word to come up again and then it gets rewarded by finding it just a few moments from the last time I read it.


That being said the first story was extremely interesting to read, but I felt slightly let down by the lack of detail in the second story.


Still, it was really out there and fun to read nonetheless.


----------


And well, I think that's all of them!

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-07-23 17:21:32


At 7/23/19 03:54 PM, Fro wrote: This one was by far the hardest one to judge. I didn't have a lot of stories to read, but all of them were extremely well done. I'll try to comment on all of them briefly.

If I was grading these all of you got an A this time around. The difference between 1st and last place is probably the difference between having a 98% in a class and having a 96% in a class. This was probably the most fun to read for sure.

1st Place: @IceDragon64

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26353800_post_text

I read this one twice. Once when my head was a little foggy one night and I kind of got the impression that it was boring the first time around. I read it again on a night where I felt better and realized how poetically professional the entirety of this was written. It truly showed the theme of the assumptions two people can have of each other.

2nd Place: @TheVanillaLog

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26350561_post_text

Originality at it's finest. I loved the simplicity that of reading almost the identical stories down to the word with the only differences being the perspectives.

3rd Place: @Xinxinix

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354831_post_text

What an incredibly dark and twisted, but yet simple story. I didn't see it going in this direction and just kind of said, "fuck" when I was done reading it. I had a couple of questions on why he didn't see any of the bodies on his way home, but perhaps that explanation is left to a longer version of this story.

Others: (In no particular order)

@LiamRomK

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354651_post_text

I enjoyed where the first story was leading up to, but felt the second story was just a tad bit too predictable. I kind of knew who the thief was as soon as the second story started and the way that he ended up taking the art was pretty straightforward, but at the same time the simplicity of the steal was kind of like artwork. Taking something from someone with a complex plan is impressive.

@123survesh

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354674_post_text

A couple of grammar/wording mistakes kind of brought this one down a little bit. There's a lot of repetition in your writing. There are times where you use the same word, for example "road" multiple times in one to two sentences that it's actually kind of distracting. My brain starts to expect the word to come up again and then it gets rewarded by finding it just a few moments from the last time I read it.

That being said the first story was extremely interesting to read, but I felt slightly let down by the lack of detail in the second story.

Still, it was really out there and fun to read nonetheless.

----------

And well, I think that's all of them!


Second place? Wahoo!


TheVanillaLog

BBS Signature

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-07-24 00:42:07


Thanks for the critique @Fro , I will try and rectify them the next time I write something. I do tend to make silly errors, thanks for pointing it out. It does help, to maintain focus and correct myself.

And a warm thank you to everyone who wrote stories here, it was always a treat to read new stories every month.


At 7/23/19 03:54 PM, Fro wrote:
1st Place: @IceDragon64

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26353800_post_text


I agree with Fro.


Your stories are well-written opposites. It's cool because you got the different countries. You have the first soldier's shame, so you're thinking there's no way anybody envies him. But then you're wrong.


And then they're written the same, but from their country's viewpoint. There's that constant mystery as to what it is that's really different between them. And then you find out it has a lot to do with their perspecitves.


The beginning escape had a lot of action, and a cool premise. A fun, short read (:


2nd Place: @TheVanillaLog

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26350561_post_text


This was really fun to read. The ending of the second story was full of anxiety and anticipation as I waited for the inevitable.


Because it was about cats and dogs I wanted to see how this was going to play out. Seeing how a society of cats vs dogs thinks when warring with each other had me on the very precipice of anxiety. I wanted them to be friends, too.


Extremely intelligent read, thanks for writing it.



3rd Place: @Xinxinix

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354831_post_text

What an incredibly dark and twisted, but yet simple story. I didn't see it going in this direction and just kind of said, "fuck" when I was done reading it. I had a couple of questions on why he didn't see any of the bodies on his way home, but perhaps that explanation is left to a longer version of this story.


Ah! Glad you liked it. I had the idea pop in my head for weeks, but I wanted to draw for the Pedro contest, so I didnt get the time to actually write it.


The last day of the contest around like 9:30pm I finally poured my energy into writing it.


I gotta say, the second story practically wrote itself; I had no idea I was going to make her character so serious.

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-07-26 18:44:55


At 7/23/19 03:54 PM, Fro wrote: This one was by far the hardest one to judge. I didn't have a lot of stories to read, but all of them were extremely well done. I'll try to comment on all of them briefly.

If I was grading these all of you got an A this time around. The difference between 1st and last place is probably the difference between having a 98% in a class and having a 96% in a class. This was probably the most fun to read for sure.

1st Place: @IceDragon64

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26353800_post_text

I read this one twice. Once when my head was a little foggy one night and I kind of got the impression that it was boring the first time around. I read it again on a night where I felt better and realized how poetically professional the entirety of this was written. It truly showed the theme of the assumptions two people can have of each other.

2nd Place: @TheVanillaLog

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26350561_post_text

Originality at it's finest. I loved the simplicity that of reading almost the identical stories down to the word with the only differences being the perspectives.

3rd Place: @Xinxinix

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354831_post_text

What an incredibly dark and twisted, but yet simple story. I didn't see it going in this direction and just kind of said, "fuck" when I was done reading it. I had a couple of questions on why he didn't see any of the bodies on his way home, but perhaps that explanation is left to a longer version of this story.

Others: (In no particular order)

@LiamRomK

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354651_post_text

I enjoyed where the first story was leading up to, but felt the second story was just a tad bit too predictable. I kind of knew who the thief was as soon as the second story started and the way that he ended up taking the art was pretty straightforward, but at the same time the simplicity of the steal was kind of like artwork. Taking something from someone with a complex plan is impressive.

@123survesh

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354674_post_text

A couple of grammar/wording mistakes kind of brought this one down a little bit. There's a lot of repetition in your writing. There are times where you use the same word, for example "road" multiple times in one to two sentences that it's actually kind of distracting. My brain starts to expect the word to come up again and then it gets rewarded by finding it just a few moments from the last time I read it.

That being said the first story was extremely interesting to read, but I felt slightly let down by the lack of detail in the second story.

Still, it was really out there and fun to read nonetheless.

----------

And well, I think that's all of them!


Well, I suppose I'm very lucky our conscientious judge read it a second time then ! It is certainly true that the story isn't exactly exciting, nor in any way "Newgrounds-bloodthirsty" and the other stories out there all had something to offer in the way of making something out of the duel POV idea; they all made an interesting read :)


If you are interested, the story took some research- in other words I Wikipedia'd a few ideas and got caught up for hours reading about such things as the German invasion of USSR. I needed to find a point in time when the two men could realistically have their extreme perceptions of how the war was going. It is, approximately correct that if you were living under German propaganda, you could think that the Germans only had to take Moscow and the whole of USSR was theirs. Perhaps it would have been?


We are the Dragons & Spirits. We are friendly people. Best Wishes, Ice!

BBS Signature

Response to MWC19 - June - Discussion 2019-07-27 20:25:49


At 7/26/19 06:44 PM, IceDragon64 wrote:
At 7/23/19 03:54 PM, Fro wrote: This one was by far the hardest one to judge. I didn't have a lot of stories to read, but all of them were extremely well done. I'll try to comment on all of them briefly.

If I was grading these all of you got an A this time around. The difference between 1st and last place is probably the difference between having a 98% in a class and having a 96% in a class. This was probably the most fun to read for sure.

1st Place: @IceDragon64

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26353800_post_text

I read this one twice. Once when my head was a little foggy one night and I kind of got the impression that it was boring the first time around. I read it again on a night where I felt better and realized how poetically professional the entirety of this was written. It truly showed the theme of the assumptions two people can have of each other.

2nd Place: @TheVanillaLog

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26350561_post_text

Originality at it's finest. I loved the simplicity that of reading almost the identical stories down to the word with the only differences being the perspectives.

3rd Place: @Xinxinix

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354831_post_text

What an incredibly dark and twisted, but yet simple story. I didn't see it going in this direction and just kind of said, "fuck" when I was done reading it. I had a couple of questions on why he didn't see any of the bodies on his way home, but perhaps that explanation is left to a longer version of this story.

Others: (In no particular order)

@LiamRomK

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354651_post_text

I enjoyed where the first story was leading up to, but felt the second story was just a tad bit too predictable. I kind of knew who the thief was as soon as the second story started and the way that he ended up taking the art was pretty straightforward, but at the same time the simplicity of the steal was kind of like artwork. Taking something from someone with a complex plan is impressive.

@123survesh

https://www.newgrounds.com/bbs/topic/1442179#bbspost26354674_post_text

A couple of grammar/wording mistakes kind of brought this one down a little bit. There's a lot of repetition in your writing. There are times where you use the same word, for example "road" multiple times in one to two sentences that it's actually kind of distracting. My brain starts to expect the word to come up again and then it gets rewarded by finding it just a few moments from the last time I read it.

That being said the first story was extremely interesting to read, but I felt slightly let down by the lack of detail in the second story.

Still, it was really out there and fun to read nonetheless.

----------

And well, I think that's all of them!
Well, I suppose I'm very lucky our conscientious judge read it a second time then ! It is certainly true that the story isn't exactly exciting, nor in any way "Newgrounds-bloodthirsty" and the other stories out there all had something to offer in the way of making something out of the duel POV idea; they all made an interesting read :)

If you are interested, the story took some research- in other words I Wikipedia'd a few ideas and got caught up for hours reading about such things as the German invasion of USSR. I needed to find a point in time when the two men could realistically have their extreme perceptions of how the war was going. It is, approximately correct that if you were living under German propaganda, you could think that the Germans only had to take Moscow and the whole of USSR was theirs. Perhaps it would have been?


I now have an AMAZING story to add to this. I went to a care home for old people today and told them about my story. One lady told me that her brother had been a POW in WW2. He said that they had a good relationship with their prison guards- when they got Red Cross Parcels, he would share his sweets with the guards. Another resident then said that his father was a POW in WW1 and HE DID THE SAME ! What an amazing, unexpected insight into their lives.


We are the Dragons & Spirits. We are friendly people. Best Wishes, Ice!

BBS Signature