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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 15:41:49 Reply

At 8/25/09 03:28 PM, angryglacier wrote:
I was thinking having a small fighter ship inside the javelin call the "splinter" I've been trying to come up with designs for it can it be in the javelin if I make it. (making spaceships/fighterships is what I'm best at)

That's a really good Idea, i've got a couple of ideas that could be used with the fighter as well; The area where it's kept could be the section underneath the cockpit of the Javelin, where a "Jaw" opens up and the fighter is then launched out into battle as a projectile, then it's flight wings fold outwards and the pilot can assume control, another idea is that the fighter is also designed to be streamlined and pointed so it can impact and penetrate into enemy ships and "Inject" the occupant into the enemy ships to raise hell inside before returning to the splinter and ejecting out again, Second idea kind of puts emphasis on it's name "Splinter"

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 15:59:22 Reply

While designing spaceships is surely alot of fun, don't you think we should be focusing on the story abit more?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 17:09:22 Reply

Pretty cool design. Angryglacier, would you mind if I PM'd you what I've done so far with my page so I can get an opinion on it?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 17:22:10 Reply

Cool. Also I've just sent you the PM.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 17:24:40 Reply

At 8/25/09 05:09 PM, Nergali wrote: Pretty cool design. Angryglacier, would you mind if I PM'd you what I've done so far with my page so I can get an opinion on it?

^^THIS- Confuses the hell out of me.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 17:25:18 Reply

At 8/25/09 05:24 PM, TheDaveAngle wrote:
At 8/25/09 05:09 PM, Nergali wrote: Pretty cool design. Angryglacier, would you mind if I PM'd you what I've done so far with my page so I can get an opinion on it?
^^THIS- Confuses the hell out of me.

Oh sorry, didn't want to post my page till it was finished.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 18:24:12 Reply

At 8/25/09 05:25 PM, Nergali wrote:
Oh sorry, didn't want to post my page till it was finished.

That better be one hell of a page you're going to post for the time it took...


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 18:51:47 Reply

(I'm not the greatest artist, but I tried my best. I'm usually better when it comes to writing than to drawing with GIMP.)

Hunched over a sensor array, the Cerxes-Class automaton tirelessly watched the readings for any anomalies. As it prepared to switch to another satellite, a sudden distortion caught its attention.

Its cybernetic brain pulsated rapidly as it integrated its right arm into the system, and within seconds it had downloaded all the knowledge surrounding the anomaly and then uploaded its report.

"THIS IS OUPOST BETA UNIT 05. UNIDENTIFIED SHIP ENTERING PLANETARY ORBIT. UNKNOWN MODEL. POSSIBILITY OF FALSE ALARM IS-"

"It is them." The voice echoed from a nearby transceiver. Its cold, calculating tone would have sent chills down the spine of any organic, but to the drone it was simply the voice of its master.

"ODDS OF MAKESHIFT CARGO SHIP, BOUNTY HUNTER CRAFT, OR PIRATE VESSEL ARE 200% HIGHER THAN-"

"I know it is them. My sources assures me of this. Prepare for contact, perform Order 34 and, if captured, initiate memory purge. If I am correct, she will be on the ship. I have been waiting for this day for some time."

"BY YOUR COMMAND."

As it automatically spoke its order acceptance speech, the doors beside it sealed shut as security measures were put into affect. Slowly the machines around it turned off, and finally, in the darkness, its visor activated, producing a sickly yellow glow.

Now it need only wait. It had its orders, and now it would follow them.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 18:54:26 Reply

Interesting.

Anyways, now that Glacier's Splinter is in the ship jaw and Darkside's Truck is safely locked down in the Hangar It's time to move out, and see what can be found out from the name of "Coris", Regardless of what danger lies ahead.

The Atmosphere disappears around The Javelin as the Air-lock opens, exposing the dark reaches of space.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 19:17:29 Reply

I'll do the next one.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 19:19:43 Reply

theres 2 things i dont get when do we post our own story pics and how are we supposed to know because at the moment it looks like your still developing the story
also can i post a redesign of the splinter i did, sorry glacier

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 19:23:09 Reply

At 8/25/09 07:17 PM, lolxxXDarkSideXxxlol wrote: I'll do the next one

sorry i was writing while you posted so i didnt see that i guess it answers my question sorry

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 19:39:59 Reply

At 8/25/09 07:19 PM, ashman112 wrote: theres 2 things i dont get when do we post our own story pics and how are we supposed to know because at the moment it looks like your still developing the story

I reckon it's pretty much set for it to be opened completely now.

Just a couple of pointers for everyone and anyone

-Try to maintain the narrative.
-Use interesting Camera angles.
-If you have difficulty with speech bubbles you may as well use the text box for dialogue, give yourself more room to work with.
-Don't overcomplicate things with too much plot twist and story, lets maintain a decent flow that the readers can follow easily.
-Rather than introducing new characters try to develop existing ones.
-Consider carefully what other users before you have contributed and established
before you put

Finally a little metaphor I use for the pacing of a story.

"Imagine someone is tickling your nose slowly with a feather, your nose begins to irritate slowly and builds up gradually, until finally you sneeze with explosive energy!"

Weird I know, but if you understand the meaning, it's quite handy.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 20:33:06 Reply

Robert checks the scanner and finds out that the Javelin is surrounded by 2 ships.
Are they friends or enemies?

Is up to you now!

Not much explanation because of my English, I'm really sorry :(

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 20:37:49 Reply

At 8/25/09 08:33 PM, lolxxXDarkSideXxxlol wrote: Robert checks the scanner and finds out that the Javelin is surrounded by 2 ships.
Are they friends or enemies?

Is up to you now!

Not much explanation because of my English, I'm really sorry :(

My God, it's full of stars... lol sorry, but I notice that their were more dots in the distance on the radar, could reinforcements be arriving?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 21:09:23 Reply

At 8/25/09 08:37 PM, Nergali wrote:
My God, it's full of stars... lol sorry, but I notice that their were more dots in the distance on the radar, could reinforcements be arriving?

Ding ding ding ding ding!
That's correct!

BTW, I forgot the stars, dangit!
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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 21:10:18 Reply

Right, I got the next one.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-25 22:39:19 Reply

Trying out some light-dark contrasts.

"MISSILE APPROACHING!"
Alarms started blaring in the cockpit to warn for the incoming armament. They could see the eerie lights of some of the spaceships that were attacking them.
Tipped with a plasma-fragmentation warhead, the missile closed in on its target; the Javelin. This type of missile, the "SSGM-441P", was guided by very advanced software which uses heat-seeking, electromagnetic guidance and shape recognition to home in on its targets. These missiles were top of the line and had to date, after 6 550 deployments, never failed to hit their targets.

It was therefore no surprise that the missile hit with deadly accuracy. The Javelin was hit above the cockpit. Plasma erupted from the warhead, quickly ionizing and melting the outer armor of the Javelin, while superheated fragments spilled on crucial components.

"WE'RE LOSING PRESSURE!"

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 00:47:56 Reply

Lets hope Maxwell can pilot the Splinter, and that the enemies don't get another lucky shot.

Who should these attacking ships belong to? Raiders attempting to make an easy score, pirates looking to plunder what they think is a lone cargo ship, a rogue government faction attempting to take over the planet and are attacking all ships that are entering/leaving it?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 06:11:15 Reply

DEAR GOD!!!!! WE'RE ALL GOING TO DIE!!!!!

I mean, I'll do the next shot.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 09:21:34 Reply

Alex activates the Evasive auto pilot, and heads for the Gauss Cannon. Risky move.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 12:35:33 Reply

I don't mean to nitpick or anything, but for a ship that isn't meant for combat and performs poorly in dogfights, don't you think it's a bit odd to have two types of missiles, plasma cannons AND a gauss turret?


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 12:40:27 Reply

At 8/26/09 12:35 PM, MeMB wrote: I don't mean to nitpick or anything, but for a ship that isn't meant for combat and performs poorly in dogfights, don't you think it's a bit odd to have two types of missiles, plasma cannons AND a gauss turret?

Every ship needs weapons, and the reason why it has 4 kinds of weapons is because of it's sheer size. But it would do poorly in dogfights because it's large and bulky and cannot outmaneuver smaller, faster ships and larger ships would just decimate it with 1 hit.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 12:58:08 Reply

Well, I had intended the ship design so that it can defend itself when needed with homing missles and a rotational cannon against smaller targets, and when it needs to attack larger targets it can do it hard and fast by using stealth to suprise the target and then use it's hard-hitting plasma cannons to focus on one point. But yeah I see your point that the ships is strangely equipped.

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 13:05:46 Reply

Well, that's the thing. It would logically never have to attack larger ships in stealth. If its purpose is reconaissance and deployment on planets, it might need some basic armaments for defense before fleeing, but for attacking or whatnot it would rely on escort ships and other support.

Just my thoughts.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 13:22:16 Reply

By the time we resort this the ship will have already been destroyed.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 20:23:27 Reply

At 8/25/09 10:39 PM, MeMB wrote: Trying out some light-dark contrasts.

Hey, MeMB, your drawings are awesome.
Wich program do you use??

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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-26 21:08:11 Reply

At 8/26/09 08:23 PM, lolxxXDarkSideXxxlol wrote:
Hey, MeMB, your drawings are awesome.
Wich program do you use??

Thanks! Glad to hear you like them. I use Photoshop CS3.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-28 17:54:46 Reply

I guess I'll do the next page.


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Response to Sentinels: Operation Leviathan 2009-08-28 20:35:13 Reply

Racing up the ladder, Alex quickly positioned herself in the cramped control room at its top. Grabbing the controls, she looked down the sights and quickly attempted to find the attacking ships. A electronic voice rang out over the intercom, saying, "Incoming ship off the starboard side. 10 meters and closing."

Swiveling instantly, she locked her sights on the incoming fighter. Catching her breath, she held the controls steady until the ship was too close too evade the attack. Firing the gauss cannon, she watched as the blue beam tore into the side of the fighter as it attempted a futile attempt to evade the attack. In a nearly blinding burst of light, the fuel supplies within the small ship ignited and tore it in two before both halves were completely ionized by the detonation of the plasma torpedoes within them.

Not wasting a second, Alex quickly turned the cannon around and searched for the second ship, but it was nowhere in sight...

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"I am matter... I am antimatter... I can see your past... I can see your future... I consume time... And I will consume you!"
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