Hello! This is a review for the NGUAC competition.
I've gone over one or two general categories of issues specific to your song, and one section of things I think also deserve complimenting. I prefer being very direct with my critique, none of it is meant to offend. Thank you for your understanding!
- I think I have the perfect piece to compare to this one for critique, and would mainly like to focus on variation as THE main thing to work on. Carpenter Brut's classic track from the same style, Turbo Killer: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wy9r2qeouiQ First of all, let's look at dynamics and variation. In your track, you currently jump almost immediately into the intense section, much like Turbo Killer. However, the distinction is that rather than being an introduction like Turbo Killer uses, this is the intro to essentially your entire track's intensity without much variation. Similarly, Turbo Killer tends to trade between two sections: Melodic sections with relatively straight rhythm, and syncopated bass rhythm focused sections. There is also a second breakdown at 2:24 to give the listener a relative break before continuing back into the intense, climactic pieces. These breaks give the listener different types of experiences within the same consistent sound palette and mix. You have the consistency down, but it would be absolutely wonderful to have more variation rather than keeping the drums, choir, and supersaws all together. You do also use plucks at the very beginning, which sound like they'd be ripe for some breakdown sections!
Compliments to the Composer:
- Honestly, the fact that this reminds me so much of Carpenter Brut means you've nailed the genre really well. With some more variation and perhaps melodic material, it'll be great to hear some new fresh tracks in this style. Your chords are consistent, you have some decent rhythmic variation, the drums are tight... good job so far - let's push it higher!
Final score: 7.2