An interesting, but lacking, piece
In my honest opinion, this song was actually quite capable of making a good impression, but what most likely killed it was the overdrawn "opening" sequence that gradually led into the final third of the song. I feel that this would have done better if everything before 1:18 had simply been removed, and then the following beat been worked on a bit more.
Simply said, the ending to this song was actually a bit catchy as well as enjoyable, but the beginning to this song just didn't present anything new or purposeful, or that the second half already managed to attain. It needs work, but it isn't all bad.