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Hello! This is a review for the NGUAC competition.

I've gone over one or two general categories of issues specific to your song, and one section of things I think also deserve complimenting. I prefer being very direct with my critique, none of it is meant to offend. Thank you for your understanding!

Constructive Criticism:

- Ooh this is gonna be fun. First things first! Let's talk about your vocals. They need more compression - at the moment, they sound really thin and generally just squished inside the rest of your instruments. Some compression would actually bring them out quite a bit more, perhaps with the barest touch of reverb and even a bit of excitation to make the top end sparkle. Sometimes I noticed your voice gets strained on particularly high and low notes. It might be worth doing some vocal exercises to improve your effective range, such as going up two octaves of a scale (with a piano for reference) and do some basic arpeggios up and down one octave chords in order to get more practiced with making your pitch switches. It's also totally fine to do a bit of touching up with autotune as long as you get the notes generally correct and more importantly, stable. You have a good amount of stability and pitch accuracy already though, so this is doing pretty good!

- You have your instrument organization down pretty well, but notice how the actual volume of your waveform remains consistent throughout the entire track. This shows a couple things - first, that it might be worth trying to vary the volume of your instruments a bit more so that some can be more background at different times, especially during the intro, outro, and breakdown. This is a really standard pop track (with interesting instruments, though!) so you'll generally be looking at this format: [Intro -> Verse -> Chorus -> Verse 2 -> Chorus -> Breakdown/Bridge -> Chorus -> Outro] You can also have another chorus or breakdown inserted in there too, but generally during your breakdowns you'll want to reduce the volume of your instruments or drop out all but one or two. Intros should introduce instruments step by step, and your first verse/chorus should also have one less instrument than the later ones, with your outro fading out or dropping instruments... even concluding your themes and ideas if you want to have a good one that's not just a really basic fadeout or cut.

Compliments to the Composer:

- I really wasn't expecting such a surprisingly clean pop song, with interesting instrumentation and generally just a really satisfying groove. The syncopation in your chords is tasty, your drumbeat grooves and has good variation, your vocals aren't actively bad even if they can be improved, you have a perfectly functional chord progression and alternate sections... I'd listen to this normally, especially if it were cleaned up a bit more and the vocals were nice. Really good job, man.

Final score: 8.3

The bridge is alright, but the verses are great. Love your voice! Might I ask, what DAW are you using? I'm looking into getting one, and wanted to know what other people are using.

DarthWeather responds:

Thanks a lot!
I am using Logic.

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3.67 / 5.00

Uploaded
Nov 20, 2020
2:47 PM EST
Genre
Dance
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6.5 MB
2 min 51 sec

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