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Sep 22, 2007 | 3:16 PM EDT
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3.5 MB
3 min 2 sec
1.67 / 5.00

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Rated 1.67 / 5 stars
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track 4 of ZMIX. plz do not tell me what i need to improve on, its mean, and cruel to me



Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

needs improvement

let me start off by saying that the first 12 seconds of this track were amazing. the heavy bass was perfectly fuzzed and sampled to give it an earthy, gritty feel.

Then it was all downhill.

The first part sounded like something that a Japanese Kids show would chew up and the vomited up due to being beaten with a bat. The melodies were crisscrossed and confused, and they conflicted with each other.
Then, the attempt at a more ambient feel failed because it was too sparse and non-linear, it didn't hold together, and all the while the same a-melodic bass line was droning in the background.
The computer noises were then just thrown in out of the blue, and they were harsh and grating on the ears. Then it was layered with an equally confused bass line that had no relationship to the melody, if it can be called that.
The beat during this section was just as scattered as the rest of the piece, and it was obnoxious and tinny, like it was made by hitting an empty soup can. then at 2:07, a new melody comes in, shrill and spiteful, that has no relationship to the rest of the piece. Then at 2:22 it is compounded by another terrible melody. mercifully, it cuts out about 13 seconds later, and all we're left with is the annoying beat and bass, and then just the bass.
The feeling of relief after taking a painful dump is experienced when the song finally ends. Overall, a piece that needs serious work.


Rated 0.5 / 5 stars

3:02 of it REALLY needs improvement

id have to say, i was absolutely astonished by the first 13 or so seconds. The preparation was quite remarkable, and was the perfect set up for an equally remarkable song. Unfortunately the rest of the song was catastrophic. Then you brought in the rest of this cataclysmic error. What had to have gotten me was the first two notes on 14 seconds, and how perfectly they matched the rest of the song... because they were the same two notes. TheUrbanNinjaGirl after listening to "The Beast I Have Become(test)". I must say I was expecting more. That song, at very least, made good use of but a single note for the entrancing melody. The same could not be said for Doo Dee Doo. The pauses that you incorporate all throughout the song leaves the listener wondering where your going with it. AT 1:27 you throw in some random beats that seem to be used as nothing more then mere filler... it was quite disappointing, with the high expectations i had from your other song. Normally I would apologize for being so critical, but I have heard what you can do! and this, THIS! its neigh insulting to my faith! If i was to give you some words of improvement, i would say to nix the little bell that you start using after the first 13 seconds of beautifully wasted potential. I am a huge fan of electronica, but your application here of the synth was at best inopportune. At 2:20 you manage to throw in perhaps 4 notes. and these notes were awkwardly repeated for a short period of time, and made me think, "what was the glorious ninja thinking?" I would have to say that perhaps a clearer use of your instruments would be beneficial. A technique I have seen used quite remarkably in other songs was incorporating more then the sheerly synthetic instruments. The application of the familiar sounds could enhance the overall message I believe you are trying to portray! And do correct me if I am wrong, but this song is about the men who were attempting to enter the clubs of new york but were being denied due to their age right? I feel every song tells a story, and that was the story i heard your song portray. Though might I add, not quite as impressive as the story of the werewolves fighting the imperials of the 8th century that you were "speaking" of in The Beast I Have Become(test). So overall, I would say, use more instruments that we are familiar with. Perhaps the use of a trumpet could enhance the synth! The possibilities are endless. Anyways, i believe you get the point. I hope you found my review helpful, it took me several hours of analyzing this song to truly put what i had to say in words. Despite my major complaints, in general, keep up the good work! I am quite curious to see what future works you come up with.