There are a lot of stuff that can be improved here. For a dance song, this one's really slow... the kick/bass sidechain was surprisingly slow. It would sound more like a dance song if you put it up to something about 150-170 BMP. The second thing is the pretty random sounding melodies. Especially that square, which has some weird notation and pitch bend. The lead has a much better and catchier melody, but it sounds pretty 'thin'- play it one or two octaves lower / detune it more / remove the phaser to make it sound better. The second part is pretty cool, I like the distorted bass. Square melody is more logical now, but there are these glitchy pitch bends that sort of annoy me. WEll, it's a good start on a song, but I really think there is a lot that can be added and changed. :3
First of all thanks for the review, it helped me a lot.
In this song I had focused a lot on the bass, I think it's more than decent but as you said, the melodies were too random and incomplete. The "Thin" melody was done especially so, I wanted to make it sound a bit classic and high-pitched.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.