Song made me think it was going to go into electro swing and it kind of did. WIth your picture i feel like you wanted to convince us you didnt try or give up? But no need to apologize, this isnt bad at all.
Now, i love the piano riff, great chords. The intro leaves something to be desired. The Constant open high hate is a little jarring but the overall idea is good, the cymbals could be different or a more unique sample, i like the over all composition and idea, just a driving technoish piece. Of course, i wouldve loved some variation, you added variation with the midi instruments doing their little climbing thing, bring in and out different instruments here and there, and that was about it. With a little more time i can tell without a doubt you wouldve been able to put in a little more love to this song.
Very good work for being on a time crunch!