The idea for this is pretty cool, oldschool even.
Some notes. I like the sample you've chosen, and the ... sounds like either a tight delay or ringmod, but I can't quite understand it. Might compress it so that the consonants are more out there.
Your drop suffers from a thin, airy quality, though I like the idea of the tone overall. I would throw a bass under it.
Mix wise, percussion at times is buried. Make sure at all times, your percussion is the loudest element -- proportionally so, so it isn't obnoxious -- in your mix. The human ear doesn't listen to it first, so it has to work twice as hard as say, even one random piano note strung somewhere in the song. We'll hear that, but we might not notice the snare unless it's an offbeat, backbeat, or funky rhythm.
Thanks for coming out to NGUAC!
Hzrdous 
