Quite good actually :)
I was hired to compose, record and produce a Catchy Avant-Garde Pop Thematic Concept Driven Song.
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The brief i was given:
This is our new attempt for the first single of Avastar No.1. We're hoping to receive some bespoke, concept-driven demos (rough demos are fine) in order to better fit the music in the storyline of Avastar No.1. Musically, it should be alt pop / avant-pop with swagger and impact. The chorus should have a hook and verses can be minimal but catchy. For the production, we'd like to hear all kinds of exciting sounds that convey the theme of the song in interesting ways (eg. foley sounds on top of traditional samples).
Here is an updated context of Avastar No.1:
Avastar No.1 was transferred to Earth from an alternate digital reality (world of bits) through a glitch. She looks like a human teenage girl, but knew nothing about the human world previously and has to learn everything from the start. By the time the first single is released, Avastar No.1 is supposed to know some simple words and curiously exploring the world around her. The new world is full of wonder, but also makes her feel lost at times.
A few concepts / stories for you to draw inspiration from:
1. Breath:
Avastar No.1 discovered “breathing” the first day she was born - she wondered why her chest was in constant movement and there was always something traveling between her nose, mouth and throat. She tried stopping the movement, but it got so uncomfortable after a few seconds that she realized the breath is essential for her life as a human being, that it's something precious. Now when Avastar No.1 is confused or overwhelmed by the new world, she takes a deep breath to feel better. The song can be about how AN1 felt when she had her first breath, how she feels to exist as a human, how she faces the unknown world with her deep breaths etc.
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My Synopsis;
I used a looping repeating chord structure to represent the repetitiveness and ongoing nature of breathing, i also used a chord sequence that never resolves or reaches "home" to give a feel of A.N1 questioning and non understanding of events, regards to foley sounds i used an old accordion with a big air leak to get a rising and falling breath, I blew into a hookah pipe tube to get a rhythmic fluttering breathy sounds, I cut up and rearranged recordings of my Air pistol gas canisters releasing gas to get a percussive Air sounds, Blowing up and deflating an airbed as response to second part of the chorus. I used a bombastic hiphop beat and bass lines to give swagger and impact, I also went for a more electronic vibe to represent A.N1 origins as Artificial Intelligence.
I tried to keep the lyrics minimal, I also used the bridge to the chorus as storytelling, A.N1 tries to stop breathing (all breath, instruments drop out) and a gasp of air just before the chorus hits as A.N1 realizes breathing is essential. Made sure the chorus was big, had a hook and was catchy which also represents A.N1 anxiety being overwhelmed by all the new sensations, takes a breath to calm herself represented in the second Verse (where everything drops out to tranquility).
I also tried to represent A.N1 personality being sensitive, vulnerable and full of emotions, with the questions and vocal nuances.
The whole vibe and production direction I took towards a more synthetic and electronic vibe not to just give it a bombastic swagger impact and morden pop feel but also highlight A.N1 origins as well as mixing human sounds to get an android/transhumanist feel.
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"Breath"
Composed by Connor Heather
Produced using Logic Pro
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Quite good actually :)
Cheers! =D
The breathing sound is driving me insane in the intro -- but I understand this is avantgarde pop. Other than that, pretty fantastic production, and said breathing sound eventually does start to work nicely in the production. You've got a lot to say, and it shows in even how you've used it. Great work.
Most of my critique will sit on mix. I want more of those hihats to come out. The breathing swell is louder than they are. Also, breathing swell is a little sibilant -- so are the vocals. I would probably compress the vocals more and do some de-essing.
Overall, sounds nice and professional. Bring out the kick and snare some more and you'll have a good, concise 00's sound. I would also chop off some sub 250 hz frequencies on any reverbs or non-basses you have just to make those basslines fit in a little nicer, maybe get 0.1 or 0.2 more dB to squeeze out of them.
Overall great piece. It'll be stuck in my head for a while.
Thanks for coming out to NGUAC!
Great feedback much appreciated will take everything on board for my next projects!
Thanks again!
You've clearly put a lot of thought into making this piece. I commemorate the effort. :)
I can see this being played at the beginning of a movie.
I think the title fits the song very well. I'd like to hear why you chose the thumbnail artwork you did for this specific piece, though.
A lot of elements, including the lyrics, work together really well. The breathy air sounds are a nice touch. I hear this piece and to me both the audio and lyrics seem logical and analytical, like every layer and element is deliberate, which helps the piece feel focused. That said, I don't hear swagger and emotional impact as much as I hear naive curiosity. That's great if it's what you're going for, but it's a little unclear if you intended to have arrogant swagger and emotional impact with this particular piece.
Still, I think you did a great job here overall.
I recommend putting the lyrics in the description.
Side note: I actually feel like I am cooling off when I hear the breathy sounds, like I'm breathing cold air. That's a really cool sensation, I don't often get affected that way from music.
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Thank you, I very appreciate the time you take to write such in depth and insightful reviews. The image I used is the image i received along with the brief... I imagine its representing the digital reality A.N1 originates from. Again you do such a great job on your reviews and its a pleasure to get feedback from someone with your methodology of reviewing it very refreshing thank you again!
WOW!... Sounds very nice :O.... I like the way you used the panning :3
Thank you!
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