very nice man works really well except i think you have the bass up to loud, thats just me though. take care brotha. peace
Not bad at all
My only real recommendation for this piece is to take your music in the background and bring it forward a bit. I understand that it's important for the beat to drive the piece, but don't let the other substance sit too far back.
Other than that, it sounds like you just need to get lyrics and vocals for it. Musically, it's not bad at all and has a catchiness to it which is what makes hip hop work.