though i do have some issues with the production / instrumentation of this song, i have to say it's incredibly charming, and something about it really hit my heart in the right place :)
the transition into 0:22 is really lovely; the vibrato in the bitcrushed synth contributes quite a lot to the character of the song. a lot of the more energetic sections in this song remind me vividly of garlagan, and one section in particular (starting at 1:49) gave me flashbacks to an artist called acloudyskye (if you haven't listen to his music before, i highly recommend you do).
i think that with a more aggressive, less muted mix, and a more vigorously worked, involved sonic palette, this song would be something really wonderful. i really do love it nonetheless, though :^)
looking forward to hearing the work you'll do in NGADM! i hope i get to go against you at some point.