Like BN said the acting isint that good, the idea was really good though the whole concept fit. Some of the rhymes were good but you gotta remember that its not all about rhyme and shit as long as your flow its good. What you guys did is have some pauses after every couple of words so what you need to do is say the full line or 2 then breath, dont pause every 3 words (The problem might of been that you guys slowed the beat a bit i think) over all honestly it was 8/10 work on the flow listen to some famous rappers and try and make the acting more realistic. Dont think that im against you guys im just telling it like it is you guys need to hear the bare facts first then youll improve trust me work on the flow most then everything else will come. You guys worked hard and i respect that, good work.
Um.. ok lets start off with heres the 5 I promised 2.43 / 5.00 (+ 1.37) and now on to constructive critiscism, ok first off your flow needs work, umm your acting needs alot of work cuz I wasn't believing a single part of it, the mic quality I'm sure you know needs improvement, the rhymes are a little on the kindergarden side, your voices were too low at most parts, choice of beat ma' buddy greeksta however it wasn't fit for those lyrics and the way you meant to express them, to put it plain and simple you have much to learn. And hope you don't take any of this personal cuz I'm sure you noticed the flaws too. Anyway
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