I'm not so sure about this song.
The music itself sounds really "busy" ?
Like it sounds like you're trying to put too many types of sound in one song, also you might want to rethink your lyrics because "In the air" isn't what the music is sounding. It's more like in space or in a tank, just not air-themed sounding.
there is a nice kind of spacy sound to it with some added parts like some kind of action is happening. there's a crackling in the song that is pretty annoying, might just be the quality of your mic. otherwise a good song.
Music has balance
Dude this has alot of potential but there needs to be balance in it figure out something less harsh
Ok being is not bad but man after a while theres to much chaos i'll give u 4 more u realy can't give.