this is scary
this is scary
There are many sudden dynamics, that could use a gentle buildup in the earlier minutes of the piece. Some parts actually do overpower the narration, more of a balancing issue than a musical one. For instance, the drumming over that narration talking about the Dublin bombings. (Incidentally, the reverb of some of the instruments also feels not fitting with the ambience.)
The chords and the dissonance are really on point. I love the musicality of this piece. The harp is nice and gentle and intriguing. The whole piece ebbs and flows with the emotions of the text, or the implications of the words, and they convey the feelings that the words convey pretty well.
Voice is a tad high, and not giving that extra bit of gravitas that could be used here. I'm not sure if it's the mic, or the voice. Fredrik Knudsen's kind of voice quality could see some use here, grave neutrality.
I've always had trouble with balancing vocals with instrumentation. Usually the vocals are way too quiet when I mix it. I tried to get the voice louder than I'm normally comfortable with just to get it to be more easily heard, but it seems I didn't go far enough.
I appreciate the feedback and will keep in mind for future works. :)
Greetings! First of all, you did a very nice job keeping the music's affection well aligned with the story! I will now say somethings that caught my attention. First of all is around 1:30, when she comes to life. Though there is an increasing tension in the harp, i feel like the resolution ends up being way too much. It feels like an unprepared climax, you know? What comes to my mind that could make that smoothier is the increase of tension by addition of layers: more instruments, instead of only the solo harp doing accelerando and going up the notes. The sudden appearance of all those instruments seems to come out of nowhere, you know? Which brings me to the other thing that i noticed, also about orchestration. The main theme (i guess? the one at the beggining and end), as beautiful as it is(great theme!), i feel it lacks orchestration. Mainly when the strings are playing it. I miss information, all i hear is violins making the melody and "the rest" as one homophonic voice, only there to establish the harmony. This problem appears once again around 6:17, when there's that climax that is a little bit disappointing due the lack of orchestration. Finally... come on..... give us the tonic at the end! Lol
You clearly have talent bro, keep it up!
P.S.: What's that hurdy gurdy library? pretty cool
Thank you for your review! :D
I'm pleased to hear that you liked my theme and, more importantly, that you thought my music aligned with the story well. The latter was my number one concern and what (I hope) could be an asset if someone want me to work with them on a project.
I'm not used to writing with orchestral instruments, so your criticism is duly noted. Listening to it now, I can understand the lack of balance and oversimplification in the orchestration in some parts. While I tried to make the "Coming to life" moment spectacular, perhaps I did over do it a bit, expecially since that's not the main climax of the story. I'll keep your feedback in mind, much appreciated. :)
As for the "hurdy gurdy" library, It's actually not a hurdy gurdy. It's sampled Uilleann pipes (irish bagpipes), which I chose because the story takes place mostly in Ireland. It's a library included with Kontakt (part of Komplete Ultimate 12). I program all my music in a piano-roll view included with Cakewalk, and with the pipes I put in some extra effort to try to make them sound more realistic.
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