I've got my monitors plugged in and running through my octacapture. I get flat response from them, incredibly accurate. Active too, so they go low and high. Stating that to clarify what is next.
Your track is too loud from the bat. Like it's limited to an inch of its life. Bass is there, but low and undefined. The beats, well muddied and low mid dominate. No snap. But that fucking donk is overly loud. Can't discern 75% of your instruments. Just middle noise all blending into a cacophony of nothing.
Please just strip it back, low levels first, run high pass on lows, low pass on highs. pan. you need to be using breakbeats for dnb, james brown gave us them.
I will never not 5. but this needs serious tlc.