i like the build up, adding something new when it gets repeated, and i like the coming down. the melody i like too.
the main thing that bugs me though is the harp line. i like the first 2, but the 3rd and definitely the 4rth just doesnt seem to fit right. it isnt necassarily the bass note they start on, but the notes in the actual running line up. other than that, its nice.
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.